Write on Wednesday

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Write On Wednesdays Exercise 10 – A Gift of Serendipity… Take Felicity’s Word of the Week. Write it at the top of your page. Set your timer for 5 minutes. Write the first words that come into your head after the Word of the Week. Stop writing when the buzzer rings. 
Felicity’s Word of the Week is…

A state of vexation caused by a perceived slight or indignity; a feeling of wounded pride.tr.v. piqued, piqu·ing, piques
1. To cause to feel resentment or indignation.
2. To provoke; arouse: The portrait piqued her curiosity.
3. To pride (oneself): He piqued himself on his stylish attire.
Trevor reached across and placed his hand on Carol’s knee, squeezing it gently before allowing his hand to wander along her thigh. He felt Carol flinch and shift away. Trevor glanced across quickly at his wife as they waited at the traffic lights. She was gazing out the window, hidden behind her black sunglasses. But her simmering resentment filled the car as potently as the scent of the lilies on the backseat.
‘Ginny held up well today,’ Trevor offered. ‘The children all spoke very well.’
‘Yes,’ Carol said flatly. ‘They all did very well.’
Trevor mistook his wife’s pain for grief, rather than the residue of guilt and emptiness left by a meaningless fuck with a man she barely knew.
‘You’ll be right love,’ he said brushing his hand along her thigh again. He couldn’t help the desire he felt, glad that blood still pumped vigorously through his body.
This time Carol pushed his hand away, annoyed. ‘The light’s green.’

18 thoughts on “Write on Wednesday

  1. The sentence with ‘ her simmering resentment’ really set the tone well.
    You have managed to fill me with tension as I read. I like the conciseness of the writing here. Sometime less is more I think. Really well done.

  2. Hi Jennifer. I could feel Carol’s ‘piquedness’ in this piece, as much as Trevor would’ve resented that light turning green. These characters are really growing on me Jennifer and i look forward to reading about them every week.

    Anne xx

  3. Like Jaimee, I found myself feeling sad for Trevor this week. The first time I have felt for him as I have been hoping to see Carol break free. I wonder how this is going to pan out? Will Carol see Trevor differently? It could go anywhere…Love the resentment being as potent as the scent of the lillies, what a great description!

  4. This is the first time that I also felt a little sorry for Trevor. These characters are so real, so relatable, that they really come alive for me.

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